So what do you think of my one shot?

[Enkil]

I woke up this morning and decided to do a fictionalized version of an experience I once had on the train in short form story style, just a 45 minute writing effort, the aim being to do a short length one shot based on a decade or so of introspection about a possible missed opportunity in my youth.. let me know what you think. Should I add to it? what questions do you have about it, something i can expand the story to answer? Go nuts - hit that reply button.

Story Link

Also.. too shy to answer publicly? You can also shoot me a private message asking there too.